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Old 06-16-2004, 09:45 AM   #1
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Steven,
I feel encouraged . . .

Thank you for the compliments Mike and Kim, you really flatter me, now I am praying I can finish her with as much deliberateness. I have been practicing hair and reading da Vinci's Book to Artists (title?) and other drawing books about him. I wish to approach the hair with a strong and positive attitude. Jimmie Arroyo makes it looks and sound so easy! Hopefully, I'll get there, too!

Will post finished product next week. All of the support and encouragement here helps me more than I can describe. This Forum is my best classroom!
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Old 06-16-2004, 07:46 PM   #2
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...reading daVinci's Book to Artists (title?)
Can you tell me more about this book? Sounds interesting.
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Old 06-17-2004, 09:24 AM   #3
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Well, she's almost done. I thought I would post again for your advice. I usually see more when it is up here, and your critiques help me too. I can see that the shape of her forehead is still not right. I need to darken the top (our) right crown of her hair. I had darkened the hair on our right but I did not like it. Her face is so soft (and I think it needs to stay that way for fear of me ruining what she and her mom and my son already like) that when I darkened the hair it kind of overwhelmed her face.

I chickened out doing the hand, every attempt on sketch paper and on this piece didn't read well. Maybe because not much of the hand is showing in the portriat and I am not the greatest with "suggesting" the hand.

Anyone have any ideas for matting and framing this piece? It is Stonehenge, a grayish blue color.

Thank you for your help.

Michelle, I will get the name of the book when I go home today. It is a great, great book to read. It is Leonardo's letters and lectures to his students. I just love reading it. I know you would like it...
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Old 06-17-2004, 10:06 AM   #4
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Lovely!

The only changes I would make would be to darken the eyes somewhat, and the mouth just a little. Right now the highest area of contrast is the top part of the hair and you might want to bring attention back to the features a bit.

You have made a family treasure.
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Old 06-22-2004, 09:28 AM   #5
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Thank you Michele for the flattering comment! I did make the adjustments you suggested and it looks great. Will post an image when I get the chance.

I did find the book I had mentioned earlier. It is small, but I have reread many many times.
[url=http://www.amazon.com/exec/obidos/ISBN=0894718347/astrokeofgeniusA/]Leonardo Da Vinci
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Old 06-22-2004, 10:17 AM   #6
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Thanks, Pat, I'll see if I can find it.
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Pat,

You've done a great job with this, best yet. I agree with Michele about the contrast, but still think that if you measured the whole picture's contrast based on how dark you made the top of her head, there is room for adjustment through out the drawing. Or you could always lighten the top. Okay, I'm kidding. It could just be much different on screen than the original, but playing with contrast would make this stand out.
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