Portrait Artist Forum    

Go Back   Portrait Artist Forum > Oil Critiques
FAQ Community Calendar Today's Posts Search


 
 
Topic Tools Search this Topic Display Modes
Prev Previous Post   Next Post Next
Old 11-13-2002, 02:56 AM   #6
Steven Sweeney Steven Sweeney is offline
Juried Member
PT 5+ years
 
Steven Sweeney's Avatar
 
Joined: Nov 2001
Location: Stillwater, MN
Posts: 1,801
Clive,

I like the work and keep dropping back in to take another look.

What I wrote about the shoulders being hunched was merely in comparison to the photo. There's nothing "wrong" with them in the painting, and in fact they convey another teen mood (besides "laid back") that I've been privileged to witness around my house of late.

That being said, I do think his left arm (on our right) looks very narrow and disappears unnaturally quickly around the body. In the photo we're actually able to see part of the arm above the elbow, before it goes into the bell of the sleeve. (Where I previously said that the shoulder might be short, I now think it also has to do with the visual absence of the upper arm.)

Reiterating the earlier comment about darks, I think you'd especially profit from letting the shadows on the floor and wall get darker as they approach the physical items that are casting those shadows. For example, if right near the bottoms of the chair legs you darken the cast shadows on the floor, you'll sit the chair down on that floor and avoid a "floating" look.

I like the yellow/red/orange and violet/gray color scheme, too, in terms both of complement and temperature. Whether you did that by design or intuition, keep doing it.
__________________
Steven Sweeney
[email protected]

"You must be present to win."
  Reply With Quote
 


Currently Active Users Viewing this Topic: 1 (0 members and 1 guests)
 

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is Off
HTML code is Off

Forum Jump

 

Make a Donation



Support the Forum by making a donation or ordering on Amazon through our search or book links..







All times are GMT -4. The time now is 05:30 AM.


Powered by vBulletin® Version 3.8.6
Copyright ©2000 - 2025, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.