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[Enzie Shahmiri]

Hi Leslie, it's going very well. Now remember, I am going to be very picky here and my only intent is to push you just a tad further.

The hair looks great. You got her right side fuzzier, thus pushing that side back-nicely done. Left side looks ok, but I would play up the strands closest to the lock of hair on her forehead. Imagine a ball, the light diffuses as it turns with the form.

Look for highlights on the hair on her forhead. You already have it, but it could benefit from more intensity. Try Yellow Ochre Pale maybe with a tad white value 9-10.



Ear has a nice shape, eyes look great. Cheeks are very well formed-nice job!

Area right above her left eye. There is a thin brown line, which needs to be that greyed down skin tone . You did it correct on her right side. This is more a cosmetic fix.

Eyelid her left side is too chromatic. Start adjusting eyelid towards nose by greying it down, do the same under the brow and then adjust the center accordingly. The eyelid sits on top of the eyeball like a glove. SO remember from dark to light to dark.

Lips are tough to do, because the skin there goes in and out an awful lot. Look at the model and hunt down the neutral shapes. Her upper lip is much more neutral then her lower lip and only has a high chroma in the mid section. The dark line on both sides of her mouth are too thick. Use a tiny brush and try ightening with a value 3 Terra Rosa. Remember I am trying to put you in the neighborhood of color-you have to be the judge if it is correct. Feather her right side and only have the left be a slightly sharper line.

Same goes for the shadow between lower lip and chin. It is way too dark. Remember flesh has no lines. Leave the line and go over it with a neutral lighter tone to take the edge and darkness off. Scumble it towards her left chin to make the shadow diffuse slowly as it enlopes the chin.

Now something I have learned in Marvin's class: Use some of that Orange of her cloth and look where it gets reflected into the skin Make sure to test, it might be too chromatic and might need to be toned down a tad. Scumble it in usually under the chin, under the lip and under the nose (anywhere were something projects out of the face and could catch a reflection. It makes everything pop even more.

This is turning out really nice and you should be very proud!

[Leslie Bohoss]

Thank you!

Okay, a new version, now hairs with more highlight. Shapes of the eyes repainted. some shadows etc.
Mouth.. I think its better, but still weak...

[Enzie Shahmiri]

Leslie, it's looking great!

Are you up to more nit picking? The highlight on her hair on the forehead is great. The only place that still looks a bit flat in the hair is on the side of the head. Again based on what I am seeing on the monitor just check and make sure that there is a subtle value change going on before it gets real dark. If the greyisch looking strand of hair on the top of her head is a value 4, scumble a bit of value 3 or 2 a bit further down before going to value 1 Burnt Umber. You might already have it there, it's just that I don't see it on my monitor.

The only thing that sticks out, is her left upper lip.The very top needs to be more neutral (by a millimeter) and the very bottom a tad darker and greyed down as well. Get rid of that line that seem to seperate the left side from the right side of the upper lip.

Your head has great form and the value changes are nicely done. Overall for future reference, lesson the degree of sharp lines. I make the same mistake and have to constanly remind myself that there are very few areas that actually show up as a line in a painting.

This painting has turned out very nice and shows a world of improvement over your last work. I hope that Marvin's pallette was as easy to work with as I promised. I think you will agree that there are no more blotchy areas, but subtle value changes!

Congratulations, you did a great job!

[Leslie Bohoss]

Are you up to more nit picking?

Sure, but I cannot change now, because I'll go on vacation.

Thanks for your very detailed help, now I understand better and better how one should see the whole process.