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Old 05-13-2007, 07:32 PM   #6
Christy Talbott Christy Talbott is offline
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Originally Posted by Alexandra Tyng
Christy,

I like this composition very much. The diagonal of the water's edge is a strong element, and I feel the girl's connection to the sun and water. I also really like the way you've painted the water and sky in the background. There are some truly lovely passages in this painting.

A few suggestions:
1) I agree with Ilaria that the color of the dress could use some variation. If you are using a good digital camera to take your reference shots, you should be able to get quite a bit of information, especially from enlargements. If you see a color, go with it. Think out beforehand how you want the dress to look, then decide how you are going to paint it that way. Don't be afraid to try something new.

2) To me, the edge of the foaming water in the middle and close distances appears to be lifting off the sand! If you reexamine your treatment of this edge, I'm sure you will find the solutionto this problem.

3) I am not sure, but the bottom of her legs and feet appear dry. I was noticing the lovely glistening skin of the child in the first painting Ilaria posted. If you could create the same look on the girl's legs it would fully connect her with the water.
Alexandra,

Once again, thank you very much for taking the time to respond to me!

I addressed your first point in my post to IIaria.

The second point you made I noticed too- much to my dismay after looking at the photo I took! And after my husband had taken the portrait to be delivered! It is what I most dislike about this painting! But that's what happens sometimes when you are working too fast! I had softened the foam a bit by rubbing it with my fingers and meant to go back and add that essential little line of shadow underneath but neglected it in my haste. No worries though. That is the main reason I'm going back to the client's home- to make that essential adjustment! I'll also grey that foam out a bit as it recedes in the distance as Allen suggested.

Your third point is also an excellent observation. I think I know just what to do there (there is the hint of it in my photo!), and will make that adjustment as well.

Christy
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