Two sisters

[Marcus Lim]

Hi Ilaria, it's a great piece of work, which has that contemporary distant feel. However, i do agree with Enzie's point that the blue-streak area is pointerly - in fact i find it's taking away our attention from the two kids.

I also notice the hard line on the sitting girl's face. I thought reducing the length of the hard line by softening some of it, might help.

[Ilaria Rosselli Del Turco]

Dear Marcus,
thank you for your comment, you are right about that line, in fact it has already gone yesterday: sometimes seeing a painting on the screen is very useful to understand what it is to be done!

Dear Mari,
thanks for reminding me this golden rule. Color temperature is something I always struggle with, even if in this case all my cools have vanished in the photograph. I will reassesss the painting with your suggestion in mind.
Recently I have added black to my palette, and it has helped me a lot in mixing cool tones, but I still have a lot to learn

Ilaria

[John Reidy]

Dear Ilaria,

I love the realistic gesture of the girl's pose and stances. I love the shadow cast by the standing girl. It pulls the wall back convincingly.

I also love the personality you captured in each girl's expression, from their stance, separation and expression.

I do agree that the forms could be turned better.

Oh, how I envy those of you who have access to view the greats. Your world, it seems to me, is filled with manna.

[Michele Rushworth]

I think I might have had the figures overlapping, so there would be more unity in the composition. Moving the younger girl down and to the right might have worked nicely. Their separate glances would have kept the feeling that they are in their own little worlds, but would have brought the painting together a bit more.

Otherwise, I like their natural "unposed" poses and their everyday, colorful little-kid clothes.

[Garth Parker]

Love the pensive expressions, especially the girl standing. Her right hand and the shadows behind it look awkward somehow. Beautiful painting, cute kids .
Jerome

[Ilaria Rosselli Del Turco]

Garth, Michele, John, thank you for your input and compliments.
I keep reworking here and there and I tried to make the best of your comments and advice.
Too late to move the little girl completely though...
Thank you
Ilaria