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Old 08-09-2005, 10:48 AM   #1
Patricia Joyce Patricia Joyce is offline
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Well, I have been working on her since I returned from the workshop and it has been very difficult. I swear it is much easier to paint from life than from a photograph, especially when my reference pic was taken on a BAD HAIR day for the model so I don't want to use the ref for the hair. I have moved the eye on our left (can you believe it?!! I'm so proud of myself) so it is not finished yet. Anyways if anyone would have some comments to help me along I would appreciate it.
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Old 08-09-2005, 12:05 PM   #2
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Hi Pat,
I am impressed of how far you have come on such short time and think that this is a beautiful portrait.
Not sure what kind of trouble you are in here, so I will tell you what I feel.

It looks as you have painted all the features a little from the right side, that angle is also supported by the position of the head on the neck. Therefore the west side of the face should be a little more narrow than the east side, which it seams not to be.

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Old 08-09-2005, 08:15 PM   #3
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Hello, Pat-

Indeed you have a beautiful painting. I can see Marvin's influence. Nice job.

My best advice is to STOP! You have accomplished the goal at the workshop. To continue would be almost impossible to pull off.

Instead, take what you went for, the knowledge, and apply it to your further endeavors.

Good work.

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Old 08-09-2005, 11:36 PM   #4
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Very nice flesh tones.

The turquoise blouse does little for the painting, and I would have elected to paint only a bit of the collar, and vignetted the rest, not painting to the edge of the canvass as you have done with the shoulder lines, particularly with the tangent at the right edge of the canvas and the tiny bit of arm showing in the corner.

However, I agree with John. Take what you learned and apply it to the next painting.
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Old 08-10-2005, 10:04 AM   #5
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I agree with you all! I think it is time to call it done and move on, since I don't know what else to do with it. I tweaked it a bit yesterday and started priming a new canvas for my next painting.

Thanks for the advice. Lon, I agree that I don't like the cropping either, but you know how it is in a workshop, you just want to paint what you see and leave it as that, a learning experience.
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Old 08-13-2005, 11:11 PM   #6
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Hi Pat,

The painting has turned out nicely and I would take the previously given advise and stop.

Remember this:

Elements that bring items forward are:
highlights
sharp lines
intense colors
strong contrast

Elements that push things back are:
lack of highlights
blurred lines
neutral colors
little contrast

Go through your check list and the errors will reveal themselves!

You have come such a long way in such as short time, I am just in awe. I know I have mentioned it already, but oh well you deserve the praise.
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