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10-10-2003, 12:35 PM
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Please critique Danielle
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10-10-2003, 01:25 PM
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Mary was having a bit of trouble resizing the image in order to post it. Here it is:
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10-10-2003, 03:18 PM
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Here is the reference
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10-10-2003, 03:27 PM
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Photo appears dark
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10-10-2003, 04:13 PM
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Hi Mary,
I assume this is your first post so I'll begin by saying "Welcome"! I can speak from experience that critiques from the many experienced and talented artists on this Forum has been of great benefit to me and I'm sure you will discover the same.
As for your painting, I think there are several areas that have opportunities for improvement, of which I'll just mention a few to get you started.
First, there appears to be a bit too much of her left nostril showing which gives the indication that it is on the same plane as her right and causes the nose to read "flat". By decreasing the size and graying or neutralizing the color it should give the indication of that side of the nose receding.
My personal preference would be to add a few more dark tones in areas, particularly on her clothing to create more depth. I think it would also be of benefit to have the right side of her face receive direct lighting and darken her left side. Maybe you could take another photo with direct lighting. This would help represent the left side of her face as receding.
Nice job on the drawing of her hands, by the way.
Good Luck!
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10-10-2003, 06:17 PM
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Changes
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10-10-2003, 09:15 PM
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She seems really crowded on the canvas. Taking out the background stuff would allow you to give her more air all around but the way it's composed, she seems like she's sitting in a tight little box.
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10-10-2003, 09:29 PM
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Hello and welcome! You've received a lot of good feedback here already, but I thought I'd jump in with a few things too.
The hands are really well done. You captured a pretty and elegant gesture and made it look effortless. Really nice.
My first impression was that this was a girl in her late teens. I think that you've aged her a bit by emphasizing the contrast in her face, notably on the left side of her nose, under her lower lip, and the contour of her upper lip. Take another look at the line of her jaw to see where it curves up into her hair, and whether the cheek plane you've given her is too large. Also, you may want to check the relative size of her parts, especially the relationship of her upper arm to her face.
Best regards
Lisa Gloria
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10-10-2003, 09:33 PM
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Cropping
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10-10-2003, 10:01 PM
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Jawline
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