Mai, I really think you have caught the concept of "private thoughts" really well!
Can you post your reference? I found more people responded to me when they saw the reference material.
I just realized why these are tricky to critique, because you can't see the image below, I bet it would make the site go way too slow, so I have opened it in another browser.
Compositionally, the woman in a single chair with the barren space really suggests "private", but my eye keeps going to the corner of the bench area, with the chair, the perspective looks like it might be a tad off. Is there something you could add to that corner that is free in shape, like flowers? I know the pro's here would have you work with your colors and values, but I am basic and think something placed there could help.
It looks like you have strong light on the left area of the wall and face, but I don't see that on the chair or throwing a stronger shadow on the wall behind her.
I think her face looks lovely. Can you post a close up? I think I would tone down the yellow in her hair, which somehow doesn't fit with the brunette. The way it is indicated I don't think looks like true blonde highlights.
I think you should keep working on this, it could become a very calming piece.
What made you think of watering down your pastels? That sounds interesting. I tried it as a background wash one time.
Best to you!
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