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Grethe, maybe the shoulders are a little too wide, especially his right one.
Maybe you have already done this, but try and look at the painting in a mirror: it willl help you see it with fresh eyes. I would also be careful about the shape of the head on the right which seems to get smaller than the neck.
My last comment regards the bottom of the painting. This is a personal fixation of mine, that I have against vignetting. I believe that it is quite difficult to choose this sort of finishing only in one area, while the canvas is covered everywhere else.
The torso is the plinth for your head, it needs a solid base to sustain the weight of the head, otherwise the whole of the figure could loose credibility.
I think Dan has given you an excellent suggestion that would rid you of the most problematic areas, maybe you could leave a little more above the hair
Ilaria
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