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Vianna,
I'm not sure what your concept is in this painting, so if what I am suggesting is at odds with the concept, then please disregard my comments.
I love the way you have portrayed Hannah. Though it's true the face is a little more patchy than need be, I think only a minor toning down will be fine. I like the colors and light you've found there.
The thing that strikes me right away is that it is all too pale. I wouldn't do much more than Mischa has suggested to change the figure, but the chair and background could use some work.
The wicker chair does not look at all like wicker. The chair arm-end that we see on the left especially does not read well. I'm pretty certain from looking at your work over time that you are totally capable of correcting this problem. The wicker weave does not have to be rendered in detail, but you do need to decide on a way you are going to suggest the weave, and try it. You may have to try two or three ways before you hit on just the right amount of detail and the right brushstrokes. It's worth looking at Sargent's portraits of Robert Louis Stevenson and the Fairchild boy. The shadow in the wicker is rather warm, and this is an important detail.
The background as you have it is an abstraction of a photographic blowout (especially the outside values) and as such doesn't really go back in space or enhance the chair or figure. I would suggest a plain background, slightly darker color than the chair, maybe relating to the shadow color of the wicker and of Hannah's skin tones. It could be a greyed version of these.
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