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The light source is coming from the upper right, and you've quite nicely rounded out the three dimensional shape of her head. However, on the left side edge of her face, by the ear, and especially on the chin, you've placed a lighter line, a highlight, almost, where there should actually be a cool turning edge.
You might be indicating reflected light, but, the reflected light in a shadow is the same value as the shadow, just a different color and a different intensity. You have crossed the line and made the reflected light a light value instead of a middle value. Your eye sees this lighter line, and wants to bring that portion of the form forward. Instead of the chin rounding back, it juts out. The line of the jaw may be dead on correct, but the jaw looks more prominent because that white highlight fools your eye.
Additionally, highest contrast, detail, and crispness of line should be on those portions of the painting that are closest to the viewer (this subject's eyes and nose). The lowest contrast, detail and crispness should be on those portions of the painting which are furthest away, (this subject's ear and side of the head.) In this case, there is too shape a line between the face and the hair. This line is also too dark, especially in reference to the too light reflected light on the side of her face and the lighter background value.
It has taken me far longer to explain the fix than it would be for you to do it, but basically, I would darken slightly the background on the left side of the girls head, soften the edge between the background and hair, the hair and the side of the face, darken the reflected light on the side of the face (just a hair....) and eliminate the highlight on the edge of the chin. All this would continue the nice, three diminutional rounding you have very successfully accomplished in the front and right side of the head.
Peggy
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