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Mark,
I like your convincing rendering of this man and also the idea of him. Not many people still play accordian, so he's kind of intriguing, yet he didn't engage me as much as I think he could have. I'm not sure exactly why, but it could be that his face has to compete too much with the strong elements of the hat and accordian. The accordian feels so dark and heavy and draws my eyes away from his face. I wondered if a close-up of his face, maybe with part of the accordian nearer to it would work? He does have an interesting face. I also thought side lighting instead of frontal lighting could be more compelling.
I was wondering about the grayish/brown tone of the paper in this portrait. Is it intentional or did the copying process change it from white? I noticed my digital camera translates a white sheet of paper into gray. I had to do a lot of fiddling to eliminate this effect. Overall I thought the muddy tone of the paper detracted from your drawing. Also the dark areas look more like charcoal than pencil, also a digital or copying effect?
-Margaret
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