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Very nice representation, which exudes character. "Bubba" sounds about right. The very first thought is that you've certainly captured the gentleman's likeness (or if you haven't, then he SHOULD look like this!!)
I generally like to see less use of white and more saturation of hues, but I realize that you're going for a particular "look" throughout the piece, and you're consistent, so this isn't a case where, say, a light chalky area is contrasting with richer treatment elsewhere in the piece.
Compositionally this is a set-up in which I would typically suggest backing the head up to get the face farther away from the edge. Here I actually think you've made the better decision, though; this fellow has presence, mass, and attitude, and the composition suggests to me a forward-leaning, sort of in-your-face gesture. The one change I'd be interested in seeing would be to arrest the movement off the left side of the portrait by having the subject's eyes looking straight out at the viewer, in a kind of "what are you lookin' at?" challenge. Also, a touch more color in the irises would increase the intensity of the eyes.
I would expect to see the widow's peak in the hairline to be closer to the center of the forehead, though I suspect that the appearance otherwise here my be due to the angle at which the hair is brushed back.
I think a darkening of the background next to the lighted side of the face, increasing the value contrast between figure and background, would have great effect in enhancing depth. Daniel's procedure for using acetate overlays would be a very useful method for testing this out.
Best,
Steven
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