Portrait Artist Forum    

Go Back   Portrait Artist Forum > Oil Critiques


Reply
 
Topic Tools Search this Topic Display Modes
Old 12-02-2012, 07:17 AM   #1
Brunella Neri Brunella Neri is offline
Juried Member
 
Brunella Neri's Avatar
 
Joined: Sep 2012
Location: Italy
Posts: 17
Libera W.i.p.




This is' the first stage of a painting ( on canvas 45x55cm ) that I'm working on these days. It 'a portrait of my mother. Her name is Libera.
Attached Images
 
__________________
"I close my eyes to see"
P. Gaugain
----------------------

http://www.equilibriarte.net/site/brunellaneri&fs=1
  Reply With Quote
Old 12-13-2012, 08:32 AM   #2
Ant Carlos Ant Carlos is offline
Juried Member
 
Ant Carlos's Avatar
 
Joined: Jul 2004
Location: Ituiutaba-MG (interior of Brazil)
Posts: 63
Send a message via ICQ to Ant Carlos Send a message via Skype™ to Ant Carlos
Hi Brunella.
The underpainting looks very well done. I'd only ask you why you chose this pose. Several issues concerning the composition are between this nice brushwork and a successful finished portrait.
__________________
www.antcarlos.com.br
  Reply With Quote
Old 12-13-2012, 09:51 AM   #3
Brunella Neri Brunella Neri is offline
Juried Member
 
Brunella Neri's Avatar
 
Joined: Sep 2012
Location: Italy
Posts: 17
Quote:
Originally Posted by Ant Carlos View Post
Hi Brunella.
The underpainting looks very well done. I'd only ask you why you chose this pose. Several issues concerning the composition are between this nice brushwork and a successful finished portrait.
I really liked this pose, instinctively, and also in the composition, but any good advice is well accepted.
__________________
"I close my eyes to see"
P. Gaugain
----------------------

http://www.equilibriarte.net/site/brunellaneri&fs=1
  Reply With Quote
Old 12-13-2012, 10:53 AM   #4
Mike McCarty Mike McCarty is offline
PHOTOGRAPHY MODERATOR
SOG Member
'03 Finalist Taos SOPA
'03 HonMen SoCal ASOPA
'03 Finalist SoCal ASOPA
'04 Finalist Taos SOPA
 
Mike McCarty's Avatar
 
Joined: Dec 2001
Location: Tulsa, Oklahoma
Posts: 2,673
Brunella,

I agree with Ant that this is a very good start. In my humble opinion I think the hand does not read well. I believe you are going to end up with a very nice portrait that is distracted by the posing of the hand.

Just for the sake of exercise I have made a modification to the composition. Something for your consideration as you go forward. The bottom portion could be in vignette with some sweeping brush strokes.

Best of luck
Attached Images
 
__________________
Mike McCarty
  Reply With Quote
Old 12-13-2012, 11:03 AM   #5
Brunella Neri Brunella Neri is offline
Juried Member
 
Brunella Neri's Avatar
 
Joined: Sep 2012
Location: Italy
Posts: 17
Quote:
Originally Posted by Mike McCarty View Post
Brunella,

I agree with Ant that this is a very good start. In my humble opinion I think the hand does not read well. I believe you are going to end up with a very nice portrait that is distracted by the posing of the hand.

Just for the sake of exercise I have made a modification to the composition. Something for your consideration as you go forward. The bottom portion could be in vignette with some sweeping brush strokes.

Best of luck
Thank you so much, Mike. I will hold in high regard your opinion. In fact, it seems to work better.

__________________
"I close my eyes to see"
P. Gaugain
----------------------

http://www.equilibriarte.net/site/brunellaneri&fs=1
  Reply With Quote
Old 12-13-2012, 01:07 PM   #6
Ant Carlos Ant Carlos is offline
Juried Member
 
Ant Carlos's Avatar
 
Joined: Jul 2004
Location: Ituiutaba-MG (interior of Brazil)
Posts: 63
Send a message via ICQ to Ant Carlos Send a message via Skype™ to Ant Carlos
Yes, the issues in my oppinion were the hand (actually the whole arm is in bad position), the table, the colar of the blouse in the back and the neck forming a straight line with the chin and cheek. It's also twisted, showing perhaps too many wrinkles.
As for the arm and the table Mike, the wizard of digiphotos, have found a great solution

But if your mother is close, I would consider arranging another pose, thinking in advance. Make some sketches first and after you decide which one is better you try and put her in that specific position.
__________________
www.antcarlos.com.br
  Reply With Quote
Old 12-14-2012, 04:33 PM   #7
Brunella Neri Brunella Neri is offline
Juried Member
 
Brunella Neri's Avatar
 
Joined: Sep 2012
Location: Italy
Posts: 17
Thank you, all
Let me explain better. In truth, it is a surprise for my mother. She do not know anything. I could not do a better photo. I used an excuse. If I had insisted, would understand.
__________________
"I close my eyes to see"
P. Gaugain
----------------------

http://www.equilibriarte.net/site/brunellaneri&fs=1
  Reply With Quote
Reply


Currently Active Users Viewing this Topic: 1 (0 members and 1 guests)
 
Topic Tools Search this Topic
Search this Topic:

Advanced Search
Display Modes

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is Off
HTML code is Off

Forum Jump

 

Make a Donation



Support the Forum by making a donation or ordering on Amazon through our search or book links..







All times are GMT -4. The time now is 08:56 AM.


Powered by vBulletin® Version 3.8.6
Copyright ©2000 - 2019, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.